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I get all sorts of compliments and little criticism because I've been asking my Facebook friends. And now...I think I'm ready to be eaten alive by the tech genius community. :)

Computer Repair & Help in Lansing by digitalctrl

Right now, this is the website in rough draft form (I was in a hurry to do a re-design because, well, it had been a long time since I made a new website for myself and after making new sites for everyone else, I figured that we deserved our own).

Any ideas, tips, CONSTRUCTIVE criticism (please, my feelings are hurt easily ;) ) would be awesomely appreciated.

Thanks, ladies and gents. :)
 
One thing I could throw in would be to make the phone number a bit more prominent, but it looks amazing. Very professional and a good use of space.
 
Main page
black heading font - b's, d's, and e's look rather strange in google crome (b's and d's are oversized, and e's look like o's with an extra line through the middle)
under Desktops & Laptops - "Bought a PC one" do you mean "PC once" or is that a brand name I've just never seen?
under Affordable Solutions for Lansing, first paragraph, last line - "our Number 1 Goals", I would capitalize "our" in keeping with the general capitalization theme of the page.
under Our Geeks Don't Come From a Retail Store, last sentence - "keep our own low while, and as always, provide great service" should be "keep our own low while, as always, providing great service" or "keep our own low while still providing great service"

Services page
under More Than Just Your Average Computer Fix - "When you want your computer, home theater, smartphone, mobile device, and other technology" personally, I would use or instead of and, but it is grammatically correct either way.
under Services For A Mobile-Digital World, second paragraph - "do not hesitate and contact us now" would be improved by saying "do not hesitate to contact us now"
under Online Backup: Free & Easy - "Backup all your important data on a computer located across the computer", I assume you mean to say "on a computer located across the internet" or something to that effect.
last sentence of same section - "we off free subscriptions with every appointment", I'm quite certain you mean to say "we offer"
under Polished. Professional. Certified. - "Professionals with intense experience", you may wish to replace "intense" with "extensive"
under Need Something Else? - "broad knowledge and experience let's us solve", should be "lets" not "let's"

About page
under Polished - "We consistently train, study, and work diligently" I would recommend changing "consistently" with "constantly"
under Different From The Big Retail Stores - "Our Experts constantly impress", this is where I would use "consistently"
under Nationally Certified - "Our Experts are constantly receiving new training and stays updated", replace "stays" with "staying"

Contact page
I can't find anything I'd change on this page. :D

Overall, it's a beautiful website. Don't take the long list of suggestions as criticism. I've rarely encountered websites that didn't have several of these easy to overlook issues.
 
norm, your list of suggestions is INCREDIBLE. This is EXACTLY the kind of thing I have been looking for. :)

I've been a little bit more swamped than usual the past week (hence the lateness in my reply) but I will be implementing your changes and several others this coming week (hopefully...tomorrow).

Thank you all for the compliments. I was really expecting you all to tear it apart. :o

Thanks again, mates. :)
 
You're website is very nice! One question, what did you use to make the text and image at the top of your home and services page change periodically? I've been looking for something similar, but haven't found anything I like.
 
dipper, unfortunately, I do not have a direct link to my Facebook page yet. Facebook requires 25 likes before you get a "custom" URL and the URL that I am currently using requires that you are logged in before you can like the page.

(brainstorm...if I asked you guys to like my page to help me reach the 25+ I need, would you do it? :) )

Will, it is a jquery plugin that I found somewhere on the Internet (if I knew exactly where, I'd tell you the website). You're more than welcome to "borrow" it if you like. It's great because I can add as many or as few images as I like, customize the amount of time it takes to switch the slide, as well as choose how long it takes to switch a slide after someone clicks the appropriate link for a slide (adding a link is as easy as using standard LI tags).

norm, I made the changes today. Funny, it seems that you and I think very similarly for our English and what not (if that makes any sense). The errors you found had me scratching my head as I couldn't figure out my intention on some of those either. :) Thanks again, mate.
 
Funny, it seems that you and I think very similarly for our English and what not (if that makes any sense). The errors you found had me scratching my head as I couldn't figure out my intention on some of those either.

The same thing happens to me all the time. I'll write something, then later when I go back to read it I can't help but think "WTF?!?!?! What the hell was I thinking?".
 
It's great, good job! The one thing that I would suggest is to put more of a "Call to Action" in the jscript slider, instead of just declaring what your services are and who you are. Design wise, your flawless!
 
phaZed, I guess I'm confused on the whole "call to action" thing.

I did change my phone call box to include a "fancier" box for the phone number......but I think this whole "call to action" thing is totally lost on me.

Can you (or anyone else) point me in to a good direction on where to start or how to start?
 
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