Thanks, criticism entirely welcome.1. lose the image selection crawl on the home page, it serves no purpose and takes up space.
2. Computer Services page . I read "computer services" three times before any information. It is redundant and superfluous.
Computer Services3. "Our London based tune-up service removes rubbish..." do I have to take my computer to London?
Computer Services
HOLLAND PARK COMPUTER SERVICES FOR HOME:
Change it to "For the Home" and the same with "HOLLAND PARK COMPUTER SERVICES FOR BUSINESS: " change to "For Business"
4. Use a more active voice for the descriptive paragraphs.
"Holland Park Computers will remove programs you no longer need making your computer faster and more reliable. More disk space will become available and boot up time can improve. Holland Park Computers will ensure any unwanted programs are removed carefully."Hope I am not to harsh. We all get attached to what we write and it is tough to take objective criticism.
"We speed up your computer and make it more reliable and flexible by carefully removing unnecessary programs. Faster start up and more room for your photos and documents"
I didn't write it but I'm going to edit it.