Need opinions about an advert

[DanF]

I don't consider myself as an excellent Photoshop user, nor an excellent marketing planner; but I've designed myself an advert that will be printed on a local magazine and distributed at the end of this month.

For the first time I've designed the advert in our language. Before, it was always in English. This will be a trial and error to see if it attracts more clients due to the 'friendliness' feel of the language. Both English and Maltese are our national languages, but we obviously use Maltese for our day to day talks and to socialize.

I'm not sure of the BSOD and laptop images (something doesn't look right, but I wanted to put in some related images).

This is a translation:

Do you have any problems with your computer?
Phone: ***** or *******

Repairs on Desktops and Notebooks
Planning of Networks for your house (inc. WiFi)
Computer upgrades
Virus and Malware removal
Personalised service
We come onsite, saving you time and money
We utilize genuine and parts of good reputation

The tag on the right says: show this advert and save... offer valid till 31st August 2012.

Link: http://i48.tinypic.com/20qje9x.jpg

 

[Dogzilla]

Hi Dan, I like the look of the advert, however as you have mentioned, i'm not sure of the BSOD image. The laptop image is fitting with the ad.

With showing the broken screen as a image, would it also not be prudent to mention that you replace lappy screens within the ad itself?

Just my 2c

 

[DanF]

Sure

I'll try to find an alternative image and mention the laptops screen replacement. Will re-upload in a minute.

Thanks for your contribution

 

[DanF]

Here's an updated version:

http://i50.tinypic.com/2jdni48.jpg

The colours have more contrast on the uploaded image, but in reality the colours are normal.

 

[Dogzilla]

That looks a lot better then the original one.

Least in my eyes

that reminds me, I must find my specs lol.