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[shfire2000]

I'm currently starting a repair company in Virginia. I have my website up and I've completed structure, layout, graphics, etc.. I'm currently working on content for the home and services pages. Please take a look at what I have so far and give me feedback on the website and my logo. My logo is also in my signature.

http://www.pcemtonline.com OR
http://www.pcemtonline.net

thanks

 

[Cornerstone Technologies]

I'm going to be honest, so don't take offense. You really should know what your services are at this point. I don't know your skill set or very much of anything about you.

I would make the content 'active' though. Instead of where you state that: we will be serving....., I would change it to We serve the following.... That way you don't accidentally leave it that way when you start promoting it. Hope i wasn't too hard on you.

 

[Cornerstone Technologies]

Also, something that I like to do is create my own news and information section. I accomplish that through a blog however. I filter through stories and summarize and add my own ideas that build on the original article. I link back to the original so my readers get a chance to see what I am referencing, should they choose. It's a lot more work and kind of a hassle, so it's not for everyone, but has a more personal feel when done well.

 

[shfire2000]

Thanks, and no offense taken. I do know what my services will be, I've been working on writing everything up to look professional yet sell my services. I've been thinking on doing a blog as you described it other than just posting the most newsworthy of the rss feeds. Thanks again for the review.

 

[Cornerstone Technologies]

Work on adding the services, and I am certain that users here would be more than helpful with wording and phrasing to be enhancing.

 

[shfire2000]

Thanks again. The services have been added.

 

[16k_zx81]

Congrats on getting a decent logo. Its a good start

1. My first impression is that the site looks dated. Its very Web 1.0-looking

2. Your prime realestate on a website is the home page. There's a lot of work to do there I think, in terms of selling your services and in terms of general appearance.

3. the tagline "we can save your computer's life!" isnt doing it for me. I have no problems with taglines, but this one I think needs some work (sorry!)

4. More phone-number visibility is always a good idea. Dont make visitors have to hunt for your details.

5. A page for each service you offer will make for better SEO

6. Your services page needs more images, graphics, text variation

7. Your internal SEO needs attention. It looks like you have not considered this in the site design.

main observations
- the site looks dated
- stating information on services is not the same thing (and not as effective) as selling your services.

 

[shfire2000]

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind.

 

[Paul Rodgers]

Too much white. I like the logo. One possibility for a tagline is something about making house calls. Play on the old time family doctor image or even medical references.

 

[parker.casey]

Along the lines of what the first reply was saying ... it's almost always best to "fake it till you make it." By that I mean even though you haven't yet started, do what you can to make it seem as though you've always been there. If you start by thinking in terms of what you -will- be doing, and you're an analytical person, you'll never actually -do- it.

 

[shfire2000]

Thank you, I'll defiantly keep working on it.