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Old 06-14-2011, 11:03 PM
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Old 06-14-2011, 11:06 PM
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The biggest thing that jumps out at me is the logo. It looks like you made it and is unprofessional looking.
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Old 06-14-2011, 11:19 PM
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Unfortunately I did make it, with lack of funds and the fact I do not know anyone who could help, I have to make do until I save up enough overhead to have it done professionally. I will definitely put it at the top of my to-do list though, I had a friend look at it as well and he mentioned the same thing.

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Old 06-14-2011, 11:23 PM
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Use text in place of your logo.
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Old 06-14-2011, 11:27 PM
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Suggestions?

Should I type up a short "About us" in it like on the page and include store hours (I got an office now ) and replace the current About Us page with a RSS feed of tips, or maybe a suggestions page that would give the customer information on how to keep their computer safe?

Being the boss is all still kinda new, hopefully I do not bug you with too many questions
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Ditch the Logo

Please.

And, seriously, read the Advertising Critique section of the Forum, apply the suggestions, then post!

The mistakes you have made are common and have been addressed here many, many times before.

Read. Apply. Post. In that order.

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I am very new to doing this as a business. I agree that starting up with limited funds is difficult.

Although I did find a UK based design company who I have used for a number of things despite the aforementioned lack of funds. They are very reasonable. IMHO.

I'll post link in a second.

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The first thing I see, is I was confused on what the site was for. The solgon "Where Street Smarts meets... blah blah blah" What? What does that even mean? It says nothing about computers.

I didn't actually figure out what the website was about until I got to the end and say the words Computer Repair then I'm like ohhhh.
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Old 06-27-2011, 04:16 AM
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https://campcomindustries.com/

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A few minor text edits I would make on the home page.

Current header text:

Quote:
Campcom Industries, LLC
"Where Street Smarts meets Corporate Strategy"
To,

Quote:
Campcom Industries
Where street smarts meets corporate strategy
Current footer text:

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Content copyright 2011. Campcom Industries. All rights reserved.
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Quote:
Copyright 2011 Campcom Industries, LLC. All rights reserved.
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