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Tiddle
01-19-2009, 04:58 PM
Do You Like It?

What Would You Add To It?

Would You Just Leave It As Is?


http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v482/haroReaper/tid3jpg.jpg



The flyers im getting done will have all the services i do.
So i really see no point in littering my card with them.
IDK



Constructive Criticism Welcome.


ADDED
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v482/haroReaper/tidback7.jpg









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http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v482/haroReaper/tidblack-1.jpg
back
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v482/haroReaper/tidbackblack-1.jpg

I KNOW I KNOW. I already read the whole white text on black background. Im getting these done for free i dont want to complain too much.
Plz let me know if this has improved any.

Romaniac
01-19-2009, 05:01 PM
Wow....looks cool.

Very tech, very pro.

If you have something else that will list your services, and you plan on doing some kind of referral program, then putting the referral form on the back would make sense.

Resler
01-19-2009, 05:10 PM
The card looks very good and professional.

The only thing I can think of adding would be an address (Obviously if your working from home and you dont want everyone and their mother knowing your address then you wouldnt do that), so maybe whatever town/city/region you live/ work in so you don't get calls from people in places you would never travel to.

Tiddle
01-19-2009, 05:27 PM
The card looks very good and professional.

The only thing I can think of adding would be an address (Obviously if your working from home and you dont want everyone and their mother knowing your address then you wouldnt do that), so maybe whatever town/city/region you live/ work in so you don't get calls from people in places you would never travel to.

Yeah im just starting out so im working from home.
Ive been just doing word of mouth work and its been going pretty good.
Im just going to pass out em around town so i highly doubt ill have someone from 100miles away'ville contacting me. So ill probably leave the address our city out!

Wow....looks cool.

Very tech, very pro.

If you have something else that will list your services, and you plan on doing some kind of referral program, then putting the referral form on the back would make sense.

Yeha im still working on a referral program.
After i get established and start doing well im thinking of setting off like a Raffle every six months.

Idk something small a camera or a free Virus removal.

Idk yet im full of ideas but i dont wanna get in over my head yet...too soon for all that.
lol

but thx guys! Keep them coming :)

seedubya
01-19-2009, 08:19 PM
Nice looking card. IIWY, I'd register my own domain. A computer guy using a free email address looks like arse, IMHO

14049752
01-19-2009, 08:21 PM
A computer guy using a free email address looks like arse, IMHO

I was going to say the same thing!

RyanMeray
01-19-2009, 08:38 PM
It's not bad, but you're falling into the same trap I fell into when I first started doing graphic design. The design is too busy and the yellow on red could be difficult to read for those with less-than-ideal eyesight.

Instead of using a red fade behind the name and number text, maybe use a white or yellow one, so that you can use black text for that portion.

I'll second the domain suggestion. If you don't want to get a domain, at the very least, go with Gmail. I'd trust a tech who uses a Live email address only slightly more than one with an AOL addy, it's really that bad.

Tiddle
01-20-2009, 01:42 AM
Nice looking card. IIWY, I'd register my own domain. A computer guy using a free email address looks like arse, IMHO

Ill work on that. Oh and seriously i sat here for about five minutes trying to figure out what "IIWY" meant..lol

I figured it out now.

It's not bad, but you're falling into the same trap I fell into when I first started doing graphic design. The design is too busy and the yellow on red could be difficult to read for those with less-than-ideal eyesight.

Instead of using a red fade behind the name and number text, maybe use a white or yellow one, so that you can use black text for that portion.

I'll second the domain suggestion. If you don't want to get a domain, at the very least, go with Gmail. I'd trust a tech who uses a Live email address only slightly more than one with an AOL addy, it's really that bad.

I got my friend to make the card for me because i dont have photoshop on this computer yet.

I kinda liked the orange, but i just texted him and told him to make a few in some different colors.

I used ".Live" because all the Other domains "JAETECH" was taken and its short and simple
easy to remember.
jae are my initials btw for those wondering

I do have a gmail,and at&t(the att is my private email) but oh god it takes forever to find a good email that someone hasnt already thought of.

schwags
01-20-2009, 04:35 AM
now some may disagree with this, but I have come to distrust people with shiny/busy looking business cards. Even if you don't get that printed on shiny paper, It is still too busy IMO. I prefer to have something simple, informative, and straight to point with a subtle design. Anyway, I suggest fading the background out and use text with more contrast.

http://littledogllc.com/images/bizcardfront.jpg

atlanticjim
01-20-2009, 09:07 AM
Perhaps you want to tell what you do. If it is home computers "COMPUTER SERVICES" may sound to some like you only handle businesses. If your market is business, not having a physical address is a negative in my opinion. After you get going you might look into having a virtual physical address, like a mail drop at a physical location.


My market is the home user and the business name is simple "Family Computer Repair" and the motto or tagline is "Repair - Restore - Renew - Upgrade". My client is the soccer mom or dad with a family computer that has been messed up by the 13 year old kid.

Tiddle
01-20-2009, 01:15 PM
Perhaps you want to tell what you do. If it is home computers "COMPUTER SERVICES" may sound to some like you only handle businesses. If your market is business, not having a physical address is a negative in my opinion. After you get going you might look into having a virtual physical address, like a mail drop at a physical location.


My market is the home user and the business name is simple "Family Computer Repair" and the motto or tagline is "Repair - Restore - Renew - Upgrade". My client is the soccer mom or dad with a family computer that has been messed up by the 13 year old kid.

Right now my market is only the home user, but what about when i expand? I dont want to have to change my name.

If i get into networking instead of just being the "friendly neighborhood comp repair guy" my name wont work.
But u do make an excellent point.

Im going to be posting pics of the other color here later on as soon as i receive the email.
I want to hear all critiques before i upload and get them printed.

Should i do them just on regular card paper, or should i do the Glossy one?

Y'all are awesome to bounce ideas off of.
At least if i do or say something stupid. I can feel like an idiot in the comfort of my own home.

Thank you.
Keep them coming.

Don
01-20-2009, 01:53 PM
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Tiddle
01-20-2009, 02:09 PM
Very Cool, I like it and yea,... Its kinda busy and the text color is very close to the b/g color. Potential clients who are color-blind or elderly or "have less-than-ideal eyesight" may not be able to easily read it. I like to go with a good contrast (maybe even to a fault www.theitguyenterprises.com (http://www.theitguyenterprises.com) ) If you guys don't mind, you could critique mine as well. thanks

Also, on the back you could offer a 10% discount for first time customers as additional incentive to choose you.

Yeah ill add that.

I like your logo, but maybe you should add buttons to your page. Instead of it being just one big scroll down.

I think it would make it better.

RyanMeray
01-20-2009, 06:04 PM
If you guys don't mind, you could critique mine as well. thanks


I'll be completely honest, but don't take this the wrong way. I just don't want to tiptoe around my opinion here.

The only thing I consider less professional than crazy color schemes is inverse typography; black backgrounds with white text drive me batty. You look at any Fortune 500 company website, you won't see a black background with white text except perhaps on a heading or in a logo. As a general rule, it's too jarring and bleak to use on the entire layout.

I'd just invert the entire design and you'll be looking a lot better. If you want to keep the logo inverted, or keep headings like that, then more power to ya. It might even look good. Also, I'd second the other poster who said to split your content into multiple pages and add a menu. But fix the colors first.

Please don't think I'm being mean, because I'm speaking from personal experience: My FIRST company stuff used to be white text on dark grey. I look back now and shudder at the thought.

Resler
01-20-2009, 09:29 PM
Very Cool, I like it and yea,... Its kinda busy and the text color is very close to the b/g color. Potential clients who are color-blind or elderly or "have less-than-ideal eyesight" may not be able to easily read it. I like to go with a good contrast (maybe even to a fault www.theitguyenterprises.com (http://www.theitguyenterprises.com) ) If you guys don't mind, you could critique mine as well. thanks

Also, on the back you could offer a 10% discount for first time customers as additional incentive to choose you.

White text on black just doesnt work. Its one of the reasons that schools are switching from chalk to dry erase boards, people just dont retain things that are written in white on a black background.

IMO When I see a website with only one page on it I think that either the owner of the site is unprofessional or just lazy. Maybe add a page about your self and a page explaining what exactly some of your serivices are (ie Explain what a network is and maybe some potential customers might hire you to set up a network, or explain things like what you do for a new computer setup that would make them want to pay you plug something when they could ask their son/nephew/whatever to come over). You also talk about switching to Linux/Open Source, maybe have a page explaining what these are and what programs you would recomend (I know you have the link on your page but why not put a page in your own words?)

Thats just what I think, Im no expert on web design or the computer serivce industry but I have picked up a few things here and there on how to get peoples attention and how to sell things to them.

Don
01-20-2009, 10:56 PM
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l337
01-22-2009, 03:39 AM
registar a doman name and park with to gmail. jose@jaetech.com will always look better then a free email adress such as live ones

Resler
01-22-2009, 10:54 AM
Should i do them just on regular card paper, or should i do the Glossy one?

I don't think there is a need for glossy cards, and Im assuming that its cheaper to get regular paper. My advice is to shop around, I've seen companies charge almost twice as much for an idential card as other companies do.


Also, I agree with the suggestion to register a domain and setup an email address there however jaetech.com is already a registered domain, some Chinese site, so you'll have to pick a different name for your domain.

Tiddle
01-22-2009, 04:41 PM
I don't think there is a need for glossy cards, and Im assuming that its cheaper to get regular paper. My advice is to shop around, I've seen companies charge almost twice as much for an idential card as other companies do.


Also, I agree with the suggestion to register a domain and setup an email address there however jaetech.com is already a registered domain, some Chinese site, so you'll have to pick a different name for your domain.

I tried to get a domain off the bat
but since jaetech was taken i got live.com
Is there any site in particular i should look at when registering ?


Glossy paper costs more and i figured some people end up throwing them away.
It makes me angry inside but its the truth.
Plus, the glossy paper is hard to write on and how would my referral part of the card work.

NWPhotog
01-22-2009, 04:46 PM
I think on the business card the white on black will be less of an issue. The orange seems to harsh to me, even worse than the white on black.

Tiddle
01-22-2009, 05:44 PM
im trying to get my domain set up right now.
I got one for like $10 bucks w and email.
For now im just going to leave these like this im not getting many printed out between 500-1000
When im about to run out ill probably design myself a simpler one. Im just waiting to get photoshop again.

l337
01-23-2009, 12:08 AM
with adobe relasing cs4 if u become desperate its amazing what u can do with a 30 day trial and i dun mean illegal use i mean 30 days with photoshop u can get alot of shiz done xD